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Saturday Sample:

Posted by Brenda Dyer on September 3, 2011 at 11:50 AM

This sample is taken from my completed WIP, Love's Prophecy.


Pain twisted Mel's gut tighter. “Breeana, I'm not asking you to give up anything.”

Her gaze was fierce. “Do you want to know what scares the shit out of me?”

“What?”

She hesitated. “I would leave everything. I'd leave it all behind because I…love you.”

His heart ground to a halt when her softly spoken words filtered through his brain. An instant later, it jumped, slamming so hard against his ribs it felt like it would burst free.

She loved him? Did he hear correct?

He searched her face and saw it was true. 

Joy, love, sadness, and God help him, hope added to the chaos of emotions he already felt.

He tilted her face up with a hand and kissed her hard. A kiss brimming with love, despair, and frustration, over a situation that held no other solution than heartbreak. And he sensed she experienced the same whirlpool of feelings. He felt it in her kiss, in the desperate way she gripped his shirt, and he tasted it in her tears.

He pulled back and stared into her eyes. “I love you, Breeana. The short time we've known one another, you have become my everything. My heart. My breath…My life. I was dead inside before you.”

 

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14 Comments

Reply Carrie Ann Ryan
12:06 PM on September 3, 2011 
Oh - that was so sweet!
Reply Brenda Dyer
12:08 PM on September 3, 2011 
Carrie Ann Ryan says...
Oh - that was so sweet!
Thank you, Carrie. Love can be so bittersweet.
Reply Jenna Jaxon
12:31 PM on September 3, 2011 
These two are are so good together! I know they will make it work in the end, but I hate that they have to go through all the angst first. Great sample, Brenda. :)
Reply Sheri Fredricks
12:38 PM on September 3, 2011 
I was told that you're NOT an author until you're published. Before that, you're a writer. I see why YOU, Brendan, are an author!! Awesome post. I absolutely LOVE those two. The way you've created a story to make them play off each other's emotions. Excellent! With Love's Prophecy, I'm always waiting to read more.
Reply Ash
1:05 PM on September 3, 2011 
Very nice!!!
Reply Brenda Dyer
1:27 PM on September 3, 2011 
Sheri Fredricks says...
I was told that you're NOT an author until you're published. Before that, you're a writer. I see why YOU, Brendan, are an author!! Awesome post. I absolutely LOVE those two. The way you've created a story to make them play off each other's emotions. Excellent! With Love's Prophecy, I'm always waiting to read more. Holy cadoodle, Sheri.....those are some pretty nice words you just typed to me. Thanks!!!
Reply Brenda Dyer
1:27 PM on September 3, 2011 
Ash says...
Very nice!!!
Ash, thanks for stopping by and joining my site!
Reply Brenda Dyer
1:30 PM on September 3, 2011 
Jenna, thanks for stopping by. I really appreciate your support!
Reply Allison Merritt
1:45 PM on September 3, 2011 
Huh. Well, I forgot my password to sign in, but anyway, very touching scene. Love the sentence, the desperate way she gripped his shirt. That's so descriptive and beautiful!
Reply Brenda Dyer
1:55 PM on September 3, 2011 
Allison Merritt says...
Huh. Well, I forgot my password to sign in, but anyway, very touching scene. Love the sentence, the desperate way she gripped his shirt. That's so descriptive and beautiful!
LOL, I almost forgot my password too. Thanks so much for coming by and leaving me a comment. And a very nice comment it is!
Reply Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner)
3:40 PM on September 3, 2011 
Heartwarming sample! Can feel the emotion :)
Reply Brenda Dyer
6:45 PM on September 3, 2011 
Ooooh, Jennifer, I'm so glad you felt the emotions. This is supposed to be a very emotional scene and I'm glad it came across.
Reply Christine Warner
12:11 PM on September 25, 2011 
WOW Brenda, this was beautifully written. Could actually feel the emotion. I'll be back next week to see what you add.
Reply Brenda Dyer
1:57 PM on September 25, 2011 
Christine Warner says...
WOW Brenda, this was beautifully written. Could actually feel the emotion. I'll be back next week to see what you add.
Thank you sooo much, Christine for stopping by and reading my sample!