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Posted by Brenda Dyer on August 28, 2011 at 11:30 AM

This is taken from my WIP called,  Through The Eyes Of Another.

Marty may be home, but what home is he talking about? That is the question....


With a violent jerk, Kirk bolted up. He drew in great gulps of air. “Marty? Steven?”  With his eyes wide, he panted, looking around. “I think I was . . . dead.”

Marty blinked. He glanced at Steven, then the burning car. Sirens whined in the distance. Dizziness gripped him, he sagged and fell forward, spiraling down, down through cold blackness. Images flew passed, but they sped by so quick he couldn't make them out.  The walls of the dark tunnel suddenly narrowed until he was literally squeezed through. He must have fainted because when he came to, he was lying on a soft mattress.

I'm home.

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9 Comments

Reply Allison Merritt
3:01 PM on August 28, 2011 
Ooo, I like. So what's this WIP about? Give me a run down.
Reply Brenda Dyer
3:09 PM on August 28, 2011 
Allison Merritt says...
Ooo, I like. So what's this WIP about? Give me a run down.
Thanks, Allison. This isn't a romance. It a story about an angel sent to earth to spy--for lack of a better word--on humans for God. God wants to know if we are worth saving. But in order for "this angel" to really know and understand what it is like for us here, he had to be born as one of us, without the memory of being an angel.
Reply Allison Merritt
3:42 PM on August 28, 2011 
Ooo, sounds really cool.
Reply Brenda Dyer
4:16 PM on August 28, 2011 
Allison Merritt says...
Ooo, sounds really cool.
Thanks!!!
Reply Jenna Jaxon
7:22 PM on August 28, 2011 
Wow, I like this. So many questions from just this little snippet. And the blurb you gave is even more intriguing. Can't wait to read more, Brenda!
Reply Brenda Dyer
7:40 PM on August 28, 2011 
Jenna Jaxon says...
Wow, I like this. So many questions from just this little snippet. And the blurb you gave is even more intriguing. Can't wait to read more, Brenda!
Thanks, Jenna. Sometimes I need to take a break from the romance genre, LOL.
Reply Sheri Fredricks
8:03 PM on August 28, 2011 
So much happens in this sentences, but it's all very clear. Good job on getting the descriptions and feel down.
Reply Brenda Dyer
8:07 PM on August 28, 2011 
Sheri Fredricks says...
So much happens in this sentences, but it's all very clear. Good job on getting the descriptions and feel down.
Thanks, Mike. I think after I start querying LP, I may clean this story up and then try and get it pubbed in a magazine.
Reply martha ramirez
12:01 PM on September 3, 2011 
Such a sweet excerpt!